Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?
There is a
heat debated
issues whether many people are doing what they hated and they have no gifted in any fields. Replace the word
heated debate
This
essay will discuss the
some particular reasons and point out the potential consequences of Remove the article
apply
this
issue.
The first possible reason for the aforementioned is lacking
of understanding Wrong verb form
a lack
themselve
. More particularly, those students who always do the same routine every single day during their school times may have no idea about Correct your spelling
themselves
themselve
since it required a long journey and effort to find out what Correct your spelling
themselves
their
talented do by trying Correct pronoun usage
they
news
Correct your spelling
new
thing
Fix the agreement mistake
things
such
as joining clubs in school or participating social activities. This
might have led to the wrong choices when they grow
up. Another potential reason is suffering parent pressure. To clarifyWrong verb form
grew
it
, many children Correct pronoun usage
apply
who
go to school to achieve high Correct pronoun usage
apply
score
and have an impressive studying background to satisfy their parents. Perhaps, they choose careers Fix the agreement mistake
scores
followed
their Replace the word
following
parents
wishes but it Change noun form
parent's
parents'
actually
what they really want. Add a missing verb
is actually
As a result
, those students may suffer boredom and madness from doing what they hate
Suffering from doing what we do not talent at could possibly lead to the
decrease in Correct article usage
a
effectiveness
of Add an article
the effectiveness
job
which Correct article usage
the job
lead
to getting laid off and Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
become
unemployed. Wrong verb form
becoming
This
may gives
rise to crime and many social problems. Change the verb form
give
Moreover
, being fired could make them suffer several mental illness
Change to a plural noun
illnesses
such
as depression and sadness. Therefore
, those aforementioned might have plummet
in the life quality.
In conclusion, Change the verb form
plummeted
this
issue caused
by a Add a missing verb
is caused
deficiecy
in understanding Correct your spelling
deficiency
yourselves
and following Replace the word
yourself
Correct pronoun usage
your parent
parent
desires. Those could give rise to Fix the agreement mistake
parents
the
increase in crime and ruin Correct article usage
an
life
quality.Correct your spelling
the
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Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The disadvantage of this...
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