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The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the propotions of visits to Ireland last year by age group, and by gender and type of visit. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two
pie
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 charts give information about visits to Ireland
last
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 year by age group and by gender,
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also
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and also
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 by type of visit. In general, we can see that older
people
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 visit Ireland more often than younger
people
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, in the second
pie
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 chart it can be clearly observed that, Ireland was visited by more males than females by both types. It is apparently seen that
,
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 teenagers and the most old
people
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 visit the country by same number. Almost a quarter attended 25-34
years
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 and 45-54
years
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 old
people
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, which is the vast majority result. 35
years
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 old
people
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 occupy only a small minority and 11 per cent
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years
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 old humans who attended the country. It is worth noticing that, an insignificant minority part
occupy
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 the
pie
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 chart. As is presented in the second
pie
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 chart,
fifty six
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fifty-six
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 per cent was frequented by men, and a small portion
men
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of men
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 attended
by
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for
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 the business reason. It is clear from the data
a
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that a
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tiny fraction
women
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of women
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 attended
by
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for
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 the same business
reason
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reasons
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like
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as
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 men. And only 40 per cent
females
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of females
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 had arrived
by
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for
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 leisure
reason
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reasons
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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