The charts below show the proportion of people’s spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008

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The pie chart represents the percentage of people’s spending on housing, clothing, entertainment, food, travel/ transport, luxury goods in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008 As the graph shows, the figure for housing, food, luxury goods,

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/ transport grew significantly during the period.

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the number of clothing was the highest in 1985. After 50 years, the value of housing was higher than the data for clothing. In

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housing increased substantially from 22% to 32%. There was a slight growth in the figure for food from 8% to 19%. The tally of travel/ transport went up

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by 7%. The proportion of luxury goods witnessed a considerable rise from around 7% to 17%.

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, there was a rapid decrease in people’s spending on clothing from 32% to 12% during the period. The declined slowly from 18% to 16%

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

expenditure
proportion
commodities
significant shifts
technological advancements
economic growth
inflation
lifestyle changes
dietary habits
leisure activities
essentials
infrastructure
policy changes
societal values
spending patterns
spending trends
implications

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