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Human activities are contributing to climate change. What extend do you agree or disagree?

#activities #climate #change
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seasons
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strongly
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 that human activities play a
role
 in these changes others think that they
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don't
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before turning to those against. In
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 will elaborate
why
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 think our activities do not
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contribute
 to
climate
change
. Season
change
 is one issue
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contradict
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alot
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a lot
 about. Because
climate
 changes are related to nature, it is harsh to blame human activities
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 its shift.
While
 other groups agree to the fact that smoking cars
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 to air pollution that makes
change
 in the ecosystem,
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 of less impact. For
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, nowadays the world is that there
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 of electric cars leading to
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 smoking cars. Farmers
on the other hand
 play a key
role
 in factors for
climate
change
. Ways to clear bushes by agricultural professionals using fire is a key point
although
 others accept violenting rules in line with
climate
change
 adds to the list.
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Because
 these fires produces a lot of fire, huge smoke is
then
 made rising to the
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skies
sky
where
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 scientist
belive
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they
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play a key
role
 in evaporation. In
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conclusion
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 strongly disagree that humans play a
role
 in the shift of
climate
 as
this
 is mainly
due to
 nature and natural
change
.
Although
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 a concern,
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 take it as a minimal lead to these changes.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks logical structure and coherence. The introduction and conclusion are unclear and inadequately presented. The main points are unsupported and lack development.
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The essay fails to fully and adequately address the task. The ideas are not comprehensive and lack clarity. It also lacks relevant specific examples to support the arguments.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • global warming
  • greenhouse gases
  • fossil fuels
  • deforestation
  • industrial processes
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • mitigating
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