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the bar charts compares the average of rainfall in three months in five city in china

the bar charts compares the average of rainfall in three months in five city in china
#bar #rainfall #three #months #five #city #china
the bar graph depicts
the
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information about the amount of
rainfall
 which
occur
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occurs
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 per average in five different parts of
china
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China
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 cities over a three months period after analyzing the graph it
clearly seen
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is clearly seen
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 that
from
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the major
rainfall
 happened in five different cities of
china
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China
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 in the
year
of
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2016 approximately equal to 680
while
 the same cities in the
year
of
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2012 and 2022 show an inclined
trend
 and reaching almost 650 and 660
furthermore
, from the
year
of
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2014
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2014,
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 the
rainfall
 average
remain
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remained
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 the same and
then
 inclined upward to nearly
about
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630 after that it
show
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showed
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inclined
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an inclined
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trend
 after two
year
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years
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 despite reaching showing upward
trend
 in 2018 before hitting its lowest point
overall
, it is vividly seen that the major
rainfall
 per average
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occurs
occur
occure
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occurred
 in the
year
of
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2016 whilst between 2018 to 2020 a downward
trend
 of
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rainfall
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rain fall
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rainfall
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occur
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occurs
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rainfall, year, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average rainfall
  • Comparative analysis
  • Climatic patterns
  • Geographical location
  • Urban development
  • Weather patterns
  • Economic impact
  • Agriculture
  • Water supply
  • Tourism
  • Climate change
  • Significant shifts
  • Trends
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