The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.

The maps show the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Write a report of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and making comparison where relevant.
The maps illustrate the development of Stokeford between 1930 and 2010.
Overall
, the city had developed from a mainly farming area into a residential area. In 1930, a
road
was connecting
north
Correct article usage
the north
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side
of the city to the south
side
, and
this
road
was still existed
Change to the active voice
still existed
existed
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in 2010 with two extensions on the right, and two others on the left. The
road
was crossing River Stroke with a bridge on the north. The farmland that used to be located on
northeast
Correct article usage
the northeast
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and southwest was completely removed by 2010. In 2010, many houses had been added at the
side
of the
road
. On the east
side
of the
road
,
Primary
Correct article usage
a Primary
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school was developed and the size is almost doubled compared to 1930. Gardens that used to be located on the east
side
of the
road
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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demolished to make way
to
Change preposition
for
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the development of
extension
Correct article usage
an extension
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road
and retirement home. On the west
side
of the
road
Add a comma
road,
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shops
was
Change the verb form
were
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removed, but the post office was still located in the same place in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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