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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear landlord, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction regarding some of the furniture's condition at the place we are currently located.
This
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 situation has become quite inconvenient for my family and
I
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me
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. Coming from Brazil, my wife, my kids, and I have recently moved over, it's been two days or so
that
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since
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 we
have
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arrived.
However
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, from the
beginning
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 something caught our attention, the furniture. The kitchen chairs are simply broken; the couch is plain worn-out; and the smaller bed for our
chilren
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children
 to use is
worn-out
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worn out
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. At
first,
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we
tought
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thought
 of letting
this
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 issue pass or perhaps, even, repairing
by
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it by
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 ourselves. Yet, we are out of time for
such
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 problems,
thus
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, I'm asking for your assistance
on
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in
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this
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manner
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matter
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. Before moving here, you mentioned a professional list of yours for household
repairing
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repair
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 needs. The thing is, I was hoping that you could call a repairman or perhaps even exchange these furniture with
other
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others
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, for the time being. Your help would be much appreciated, especially now that we don't have the time to look for a solution ourselves. Feel free to contact me for any
question
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 or
concern
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concerns
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 on my mobile phone number 111111111. Thank you very much. Yours faithfully, Adam Jones.

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task response
Ensure that the letter addresses all aspects of the task, including clearly explaining the issues with the furniture and requesting specific actions from the landlord.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing the letter with clearer paragraph structure and use of transition words to improve overall coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary to add depth and formality to the letter. Consider using varied synonyms and more advanced vocabulary where appropriate.
grammatical range
Pay attention to the use of complex sentence structures and advanced grammar forms to showcase a higher level of grammatical range and accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear
  • I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
  • regarding
  • the condition
  • furniture
  • belongings
  • for instance
  • damaged
  • broken
  • worn-out
  • appliance
  • household items
  • it is unacceptable
  • inconvenient
  • inhabitable
  • affecting
  • negatively
  • urgent attention
  • replacement
  • repair
  • resolve
  • maintenance
  • prompt response
  • Thank you for your attention
  • Yours sincerely
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