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Some people think that students should learn a range of practical skills at school (such as car maintenance or managing money) alongside traditional subjects like maths and physics. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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There is an
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 the students should learn a range of practical skills at the institute alongside traditional subjects. Personally speaking, I strongly agree with the statement given above, In
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Firstly
, when we talk about practical knowledge which is really
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 for generations, if schools started teaching you practical stuff like car maintenance or
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 of money, that would be really beneficial for children's future, extracting that kind of knowledge would make them
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 and independent. Another major reason for having practical knowledge is that, by learning things at a young age, a person opens so many new
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opportunities
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instance a student gets into a wrong course, they would be able to develop their future in other field on the basis of their skills.
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, some may say that learning practical things at a young age, would lead a child to some other way, where they would not find much success, but adding to
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 we could say that, they would at least live happily.
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, we must say that the government should start a scheme, in which the students are taught practical stuff, for their better and
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 life, as said, if the generation is not able to make cash enough, but if they are doing something which makes them happy,
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 it is absolutely right.
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