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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Sumarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graph
belows
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below
 shows data
of
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 a report in 2008 about expenditure of
energy
 in the USA from 1980 to planning in 2030.
Overall
,
whereas
the
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fossil fuel included: petrol and oil, coal, and
gas
was
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 the majority,
the
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renewable
energy
consist
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 of nuclear, solar/wind and hydropower was just a minority. In general, there was
a
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 upward trend in all types of
energy
. In 1980, with 35Q petrol and oil were dominant
energy
 using, more 15Q and 20Q than
Gas
 and Coal respectively. The quantity of petrol and oil seen
a
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fluctuate
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fluctuated
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 until 1995, before
increase
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 sharply to 50Q in 2030.
Similarly
in
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the amount of
Gas
, witnessed a little change in the first 35 years around 20Q and there was a slight decrease in the figure
of
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 Coal. Meanwhile, coal was expected to climb by 5Q since 2015 up to 30Q,
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 total of natural
gas
 will remain unchanged at 25Q until 2030.
On the other hand
,
at
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the starting point
about
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,
the
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renewable
energy
have
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a
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 same figures at 40Q.
In addition
, the quadrillion of nuclear [Verb missing] slowly
growth
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 during 50 years from 4Q to 7Q in 2030/ . Over the 30 years, there [[verb missing] a continuous change in Solar/Wind and Hydropower, after that, the expanse (wrong meaning] of Solar/Wind was predicted will stable at 6Q and Hydropower’s figure return to
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 ordinary point.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, q with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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