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Tak 1 The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The two plans
illutrate
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illustrate
that
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apply
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the proposed renovation of the university's
sport
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sports
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 centre.
Overall
, the outdoor court
have
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 been completely demolished.
Gym
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The gym
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 will undergo the exoansion
while
pool
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the pool
a pool
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, seating , changing room and reception stay in the same location. Two dance studios and changing rooms will be established in future.
Further
,
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a lesure
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lesure
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leisure
pool
 and sports hall will be added as new facilities. Currently, there are two
iutdoor
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outdoor
 courts which are located right and left
side
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sides
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 of the 25m
pool
. The
entrabce
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entrance
 face towards the reception which has located south
coner
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corner
 of the
pool
. A single changing room and
seatings
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seating
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 are located facing towards the
swimmimg
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swimming
pool
.
According to
 the proposal, only the 25m
pool
 seating and
changing
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the changing
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 room will remain
unchange
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unchanged
. The most significant development will be the establishment of
leisure
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a leisure
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pool
, sport hall and dance studios. The gym will
be undergo
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further
 expansion.
Sport
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A sports
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 shop and cafe will be added beside the entrance
while
 reception at the original location. New changing rooms will be built
south west
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southwest
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 and
south east
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southeast
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coners
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corners
corner
 of the complex.
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task response
Answer the essay question more comprehensively. Include detailed comparisons of the before and after plans and focus on the main features of the renovation.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Additionally, the organization of information could be improved for better coherence and flow.
lexical resource
The vocabulary used is adequate, but some technical terms related to sports facilities and renovation could be included for better lexical resource.
grammatical range
There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing throughout the essay. Work on sentence structure, verb tenses, and punctuation for better grammatical range.

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