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Academic - Task 1 The twp maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

Academic - Task 1 The twp maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
#twp #maps #show #road #access #city #summarise #information #features #comparisions
The both
Remove the article
Both
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 maps display the changes of
acess
Correct your spelling
access
road
Fix the agreement mistake
roads
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 to a
city
 hospital in 2007 and in 2010. In 2007, the
city
 hospital had only one direct access
road
 from the
city
road
.
Further
, there was a single
car
park
 which was common to staff and public.
This
car
park
 was located between
city
Correct article usage
the city
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 hospital Ring
Road
 and the
City
Road
. Vehicles
was
Change the verb form
were
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 able to
entered
Change the verb
enter
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 the
park
 using the North opening which was directed to the Ring
Road
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the plan was to improve the
road
 access to the
city
 hospital. The
car
park
 was separated into two different locations and several
roundabout
Change to a plural noun
roundabouts
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 have
built
Add a missing verb
been built
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. Especially, the bus station re-located near
by
Change preposition
apply
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the hospital. In 2010, the bus station
has
Verb problem
was
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 brought to
right
Add an article
the right
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 side of
the
Correct article usage
apply
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Hospital
Road
.
Moreover
, it contains two direct access to both roundabouts. There are two
separated
Replace the word
separate
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car
 parks
allow
Correct pronoun usage
that allow
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to
Verb problem
apply
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park
 staff vehicles and public vehicles at different locations.
However
,
entrance
Add an article
the entrance
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 of both
car
 parks faced towards the Ring
Road
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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