The chart below shows purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011

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The chart illustrates the rate of buying four types of meats in the UK between 1974 to 2011.

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, beef

has

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had

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the

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highest point

between

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among

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others

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the beginning of the

year

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, but experienced a decline almost twofold.

In contrast

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, chicken

was growth

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grew

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steadily and hit a high of approximately 250 grams, which is

the most

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significant than others.

To begin

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, four kinds of meat have different

started

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starting

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point

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points

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in the first

year

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whereas

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the

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apply

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beef was the most popular and

the

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apply

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fish was lessen-opt to buy,

however

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, over

the

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apply

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time

the

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beef experienced a fall,

then

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from 1999 to 2004 replaced by

the

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apply

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chicken meat as the highest.

In addition

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, in the

year

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1979, the lamb straight to

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apply

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decrease but in another

year

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which is in 1989, the lamb was experienced a rise,

however

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, the ward tended to more erratic because the ward

changes

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has changed

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slightly

frequent

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frequently

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over the past 25 years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

153 words

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The chart below shows purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011

People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of technology and transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it? what do you think are the main causes of this problem abd what measures could be taken to solve it ?

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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports in the media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. Dương.

Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Others believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.