The chart below shows purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011

The chart below shows purchase levels of four meats in the UK from 1974 to 2011
The chart illustrates the rate of buying four types of meats in the UK between 1974 to 2011.
Overall
, beef
has
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a
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highest point
between
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others
in
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the beginning of the
year
, but experienced a decline almost twofold.
In contrast
, chicken
was growth
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steadily and hit a high of approximately 250 grams, which is
the most
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significant than others.
To begin
, four kinds of meat have different
started
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point
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in the first
year
,
whereas
,
the
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beef was the most popular and
the
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fish was lessen-opt to buy,
however
, over
the
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time
the
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beef experienced a fall,
then
from 1999 to 2004 replaced by
the
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chicken meat as the highest.
In addition
, in the
year
1979, the lamb straight to
a
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decrease but in another
year
which is in 1989, the lamb was experienced a rise,
however
, the ward tended to more erratic because the ward
changes
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slightly
frequent
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over the past 25 years.
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