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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the layout of the
road
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 leading to a
city
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 hospital in two different years, which are 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, in 2010,
the
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access to the
city
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 hospital
has undergone
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underwent
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 several changes, the most significant of which
are
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were
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established
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the established
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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 and more parking
space
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spaces
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. In regard to 2007, which only
had
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one parking space provided for staff and
public
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the public
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at
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on
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 the east
od
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of
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
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 that leads to
ring
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the ring
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road
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 where the
city
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 hospital is located
at
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apply
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.
Moreover
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, there once were many trees planted along the side of the hospital
road
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 and all
had been
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were
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 uprooted in
the
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apply
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2010.
Meanwhile
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Meanwhile,
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in
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apply
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three years later
after
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in
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 2007, there
are
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were
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 two roundabouts constructed, where the first one
is
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was
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 in the middle of
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city
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the city
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road
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 and the other
installed
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was installed
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 to the north of the first one through the hospital
rd
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road
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, and both of them had access to
bus
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the bus
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 station.
In addition
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,
at
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to
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 the west of
hospital
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Hospital Road
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road
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road,
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 there is
bus
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a bus
the bus
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 station
,
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apply
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 and
staff
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a staff
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 car park on the east. Meanwhile,
for
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apply
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the public car park,
it
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apply
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is relocated to the east of
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city
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the city
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 hospital.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road access
  • city hospital
  • traffic flow
  • public transport facilities
  • intersection
  • roundabout
  • car park
  • dedicated
  • modifications
  • congestion
  • accessibility
  • hospital entrance
  • parking areas
  • main features
  • signage
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