employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs personal information, such as their hobbies and inerests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
The process of being accepted
in
one organization is for employers to go through the applicants' resumes. Some employers find personal Change preposition
by
information
such
as hobbies, interest, or even their relationship status important, whilst others find it is not useful to include such
information
. This
essay agrees that personal data
should be included in their resumes.
Personal information
such
as hobbies or interests can be considered as a crucial part of selecting the right person for the job. For example
, If one of the job requirements is to collect data
from sources like newspapers or research papers, then
it is best suited for employer
to select someone with reading as their main hobby. Add an article
an employer
the employer
Moreover
, relationship status also
can be one of the criteria to choose the best candidate. For instance
, there might be a job requirement that requires lots of travelling. Thus
, the person who has a spouse will have
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be
to keep
travelling. Verb problem
by
This
meaning
that personal Replace the word
means
data
can be a good insight for employers for the recruitment process.
There is an argument who believe that those kinds of section is not suitable to be added to a resume. As it is considered not important the sections such
as background experiences, their history of education, and their skill sets are far more valuable. For example
, In some countries especially in European countries, they believe that a resume should be free from any irrelevant data
and even a picture of the candidate is not allowed. However
, some information
on their interest or hobbies can be added
value and highlight their strength compared to other candidates.
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add
To conclude
, personal information
provides deep insight to the recruiters on who they are and helps the recruiters to be more selective in choosing the future employee if compared to those who just provided facts in their resumes.Submitted by lavenia34808 on
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