The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph
descibe
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describes
describe
the
infromation
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information
about the new
opening
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openings
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and
permentant
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permanent
closing
the
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of the
show examples
shops
in
years
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the years
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between 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it
is clearly observe
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is clearly observed
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that in these 7 years,
closing
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the closing
show examples
of old
shops
and
opening
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the opening
show examples
of new
shops
are
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have
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decrease
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decreased
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from the initial year. To continue with
starting
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the starting
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year, new open
shops
were recorded 9000
however
6500 old
shops
were
close
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closed
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. Moving
further
in 2014,
closing
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the closing
show examples
and opening
shops
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of shops
show examples
were
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apply
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witnessed
same
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the same
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that was 6500.  Apart from that,
trend
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the trend
a trend
show examples
of new
opening
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openings
show examples
were
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apply
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showed downwards
that
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which
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was 4000 approx. By the end of 2015, only 500
shops
were open.
Besides
this
closures
were
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apply
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showed the same trend as
year
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the year
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2012, which was followed till 2017. In
addation
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addition
, in
last
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the last
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two years, open
shops
were nearly 5000. Yet,
closing
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the closing
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of
shops
were
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apply
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in 2016 and 2018 were noted
4000
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at 4000
show examples
and 3000 respectively.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • decline
  • increase
  • peak
  • trough
  • magnitude
  • trend
  • surpass
  • plummet
  • annual
  • consecutive
  • closure rate
  • inception rate
  • net growth
  • commercial landscape
  • retail sector
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