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Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and government, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

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There is a contentious argument over whether
climate
change
 is the responsibility of the
people
 or the government. I strongly agree with
this
 statement, because
climate
change
 has reached a very difficult level where governments cannot control it alone. In
this
 essay, I am going to explain
further
 about
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the main reason why I believe that
people
 should be held accountable regarding
this
 issue is that most of the population living in a certain country should try to limit the usage of cars that operate on gas.
In addition
 to that,
people
 should be educated about the dangers of
climate
change
.
This
 can be seen when Sweden launched a campaign in 2013 that encouraged
people
 to buy electric cars
instead
 of gas cars,
furthermore
, Swedish
people
 started to learn more about
climate
change
, and now we can see that Sweden is one of the countries concerned with
climate
 issues. Another reason why I support
this
 claim is that
climate
change
 is caused
due to
 many factors, and one of those factors is
pollution
.
Pollution
 is caused when waste in the environment is high,
this
 will lead to global warming, and
thus
 to
climate
change
, and the main culprit is the population that does not care about the environment. To illustrate, a recent study shows that developing countries have a higher rate of
climate
change
 than developed ones, let's take Congo as an example, from 1956 to 2007 the
change
 in
climate
 was about 9% and
this
 is one of the world's highest, and all of that was caused by
pollution
. In conclusion, I completely agree that
climate
change
 is the
people
's responsibility, because these
people
 are capable of causing
pollution
 and extended gas car usage. Given
this
 situation, it seems that governments should begin to be aware their
people
 about the dangers of
climate
change
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