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Band 6

You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am a future student of your college enrolled in a project management course
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 the Waterloo campus. I am going to demonstrate my requirements regarding my period of stay. I request you to provide me an accommodation in the student residence hall
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 the campus itself with my class fellows.
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 building has a library and internet services which help me in my research work and save my daily travelling time. Moving
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 towards my food choices, I am vegetarian and cannot eat eggs and seafood.
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 have an allergy to dry fruits which cause me skin problems. I request you to consider my concern and provide me with better accommodation with vegetarian food. In case you fail to meet
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 criterion kindly allow me girls' hostel with vegetarian food, it is my second preference. I am looking forward to your reply Yours faithfully Navdeep
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task response
Ensure that the letter responds fully to all parts of the prompt, and consider the tone and style appropriate for the purpose.
coherence cohesion
Organize ideas and information coherently and cohesively, ensuring a logical progression throughout the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary appropriately to convey meaning precisely.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structures and accuracy of grammar throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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