Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter  suggest a suitable date and time for the party  recommend a venue  propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Mr Andrew, I want to inform you again about

Winda

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farewell party. I think it would be good if we make it

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this

Friday, November 15

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7pm

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. I already

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all of the team, and everyone

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. For the venue, I would recommend around

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area. Maybe Lucy in The Sky is the suitable one

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because it is the nearest venue. But, as I remember, you might like

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area. So, I recommend Botella Bar at Antasari, South Jakarta. It will take 15 minutes from the office. And

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, for the food and

beverages

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it would be good if we choose

all you can eat

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and free flow. So, everyone will

happy

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for

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that. And for the entertainment, the venue I already mentioned held

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band on that day. So, we do not

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worry about it. Kindly give me advice for

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party. Waiting for your

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. Sincerely, Dini

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coherence cohesion

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lexical resource

Use a wider range of vocabulary and try to avoid repetitive use of words and phrases.

grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and the correct use of articles to ensure accuracy in grammar.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

157 words

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Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter  suggest a suitable date and time for the party  recommend a venue  propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, the crimes rate amongst underaged people has been rising. Discuss the causes and solutions for this problem.

Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.