Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter  suggest a suitable date and time for the party  recommend a venue  propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

Dear Mr Andrew, I want to inform you again about
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farewell party. I think it would be good if we make it
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this
Friday, November 15
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7pm
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finish
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. I already
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all of the team, and everyone
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. For the venue, I would recommend around
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area. Maybe Lucy in The Sky is the suitable one
,
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because it is the nearest venue. But, as I remember, you might like
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area. So, I recommend Botella Bar at Antasari, South Jakarta. It will take 15 minutes from the office. And
then
, for the food and
beverages
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it would be good if we choose
all you can eat
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and free flow. So, everyone will
happy
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for
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that. And for the entertainment, the venue I already mentioned held
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band on that day. So, we do not
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worry about it. Kindly give me advice for
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party. Waiting for your
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. Sincerely, Dini
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