Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter suggest a suitable date and time for the party recommend a venue propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.
Dear Mr Andrew,
I want to inform you again about
Winda
farewell party. I think it would be good if we make it Change noun form
Winda's
on
Change preposition
apply
this
Friday, November 15 start
Wrong verb form
starting
on
7pm Change preposition
at
until
Correct word choice
and
finish
. I already Wrong verb form
finishing
check
all of the team, and everyone Wrong verb form
checked
is agree
.
For the venue, I would recommend around Wrong verb form
agreed
SCBD
area. Maybe Lucy in The Sky is the suitable oneCorrect article usage
the SCBD
,
because it is the nearest venue. But, as I remember, you might like Remove the comma
apply
private
area. So, I recommend Botella Bar at Antasari, South Jakarta. It will take 15 minutes from the office.
And Correct article usage
a private
then
, for the food and beverages
it would be good if we choose Add a comma
beverages,
all you can eat
and free flow. So, everyone will Add a hyphen
all-you-can-eat
happy
Add a missing verb
be happy
for
that. And for the entertainment, the venue I already mentioned held Change preposition
about
home
band on that day. So, we do not Correct article usage
a home
to
worry about it.
Kindly give me advice for Add a missing verb
have to
this
party.
Waiting for your respond
.
Sincerely,
DiniReplace the word
response
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