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The charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people's spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008.
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The bar charts below illustrate the percentage of six different kinds of personal expenditures in one specific European country in 2 years 1958 and 2008.
According to
 the data, the expenses of housing, travel and luxurious goods saw a considerable rise during the period
while
 the other three factors namely food, clothing and entertainment observed the opposite pattern when the figures decreased slightly.
It is clear that
 people spent most of their income on accommodations when the rate increased moderately from 22% to 32%, followed by the growth of the transport budget with nearly 10% higher in 2008 compared with 1958.
In addition
, we can see that there was a rapid rise of 10% in the expense of luxury products. Generally, it was
equal
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 10% increment for all three segments
On the other hand
, there was a remarkable plummet of almost 20% in people's spending on food in 2008.
In contrast
, the clothing and entertainment sectors witnessed a minimal decline of approximately 2% and 7% respectively.
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