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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the infotmation by selecting and reportying the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the infotmation by selecting and reportying the main features, and make comprasions where relevant.
Four pie charts
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provide
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 us
information
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with information
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 on the ages of the populations of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Firstly
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, we can see that
Yemen
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's
population
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 in
2000
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the 2000
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 year were mostly from 0-14 aged
kids
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.
This
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 is
a
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apply
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50,1% of
all
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apply
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the
population
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. 15-59 years old people make up 46,3% of the country's
population
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. 60+ aged persons
stays
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at
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in
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 third place with 3,6% of the country's
population
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.
Prognosis
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to
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for
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 2050
about
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for
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Yemen
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's
population
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 looks different
than
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from than
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 statistics in 2000. Most changes between 15-59 aged and 0-14 aged
peoples
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people
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. Adult persons would compose the vast majority. There is a big difference between
Yemen
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 and Italy's
population
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value
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values
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. In 2000 origin country of lasagna
were
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was
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 inhabited by
the
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apply
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15-59 aged folk. It was
a
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apply
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61,6% of the total
population
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 of
nation
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the nation
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.
Kids
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 between 0 and 14 were 14,3% of the total amount and older
peoples
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people
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 were between
kids
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 and adults with 24,1%. Projections for 2050 in Italy
doesn't
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don't
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 look similar to
2000
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the 2000
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 year.
Kids
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 will keep the
last
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 position in
chart
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the chart
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, but old persons will come closer to adult folk with their 42,3% versus 46,2%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, population, kids with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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