The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
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The pie charts describe the proportion of
volunteers
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six different
sectors
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had in 2008 and 2014. In 2008, educational
volunteers
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made up about a quarter (24%), which was closely followed by the
figure
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for those in the environmental
sector
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, at 21%. The figures for sport and other
sectors
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were identical, at 15%, which was 3% less than that for art, and by far the smallest percentage of
volunteers
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was accounted for by
healthcare
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professionals. The shares of
volunteers
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in all
sectors
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changed in 2014, albeit to varying degrees. The
figure
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for
sport
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volunteers
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soared to a quarter.
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,
volunteer
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the volunteer
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pool in the environmental
sector
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rose to 29%;
however
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, there was a mere
one-percent
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increase in the
healthcare
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sector
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.
In contrast
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, the proportions of
volunteers
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in art and others both dropped by 6% to 12% and 9%, respectively.
Finally
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, the
figure
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for educational
volunteers
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also
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declined, making up 17% in 2014.
Overall
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, in 2008, the highest percentage of
volunteers
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was in the education section as opposed to the
healthcare
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sector
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, which had the lowest
figure
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. Six years later,
however
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, the environmental
sector
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ranked first in terms of the share of
volunteers
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while
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healthcare
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volunteers
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still made up the smallest percentage.
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, the share of
volunteers
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in
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the sport
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sport
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, environmental, and
healthcare
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sectors
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grew, but the reverse was true for the remaining
sectors
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, sectors, figure, sector, healthcare with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • volunteer
  • organizations
  • data
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • notable
  • significant
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • observe
  • economic
  • societal
  • changes
  • overall
  • key observations
  • notably
  • fluctuate
  • stable
  • marked
  • growth
  • decline
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