The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.

The charts below show the percentages of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
The pie charts describe the proportion of
volunteers
six different
sectors
had in 2008 and 2014. In 2008, educational
volunteers
made up about a quarter (24%), which was closely followed by the
figure
for those in the environmental
sector
, at 21%. The figures for sport and other
sectors
were identical, at 15%, which was 3% less than that for art, and by far the smallest percentage of
volunteers
was accounted for by
healthcare
professionals. The shares of
volunteers
in all
sectors
changed in 2014, albeit to varying degrees. The
figure
for
sport
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sports
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volunteers
soared to a quarter.
Similarly
,
volunteer
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the volunteer
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pool in the environmental
sector
rose to 29%;
however
, there was a mere
one-percent
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one per cent
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increase in the
healthcare
sector
.
In contrast
, the proportions of
volunteers
in art and others both dropped by 6% to 12% and 9%, respectively.
Finally
, the
figure
for educational
volunteers
also
declined, making up 17% in 2014.
Overall
, in 2008, the highest percentage of
volunteers
was in the education section as opposed to the
healthcare
sector
, which had the lowest
figure
. Six years later,
however
, the environmental
sector
ranked first in terms of the share of
volunteers
while
healthcare
volunteers
still made up the smallest percentage.
Furthermore
, the share of
volunteers
in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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, environmental, and
healthcare
sectors
grew, but the reverse was true for the remaining
sectors
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, sectors, figure, sector, healthcare with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • volunteer
  • organizations
  • data
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • notable
  • significant
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • highlight
  • observe
  • economic
  • societal
  • changes
  • overall
  • key observations
  • notably
  • fluctuate
  • stable
  • marked
  • growth
  • decline
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