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he figure gives information about smoking habits of the UK population by age. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of individuals, who smoked in three various
aged
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groups from 1965 to 2015 in the UK.
Overall
, the number of smokers in life groups 36-50 and more than 50
years
 decreased significantly over the period in question,
whereas
 the percentage of adults between 20 and 35
years
 demonstrated a dramatic growth. In more detail, the consumption of cigarettes by the maturity group under 50
years
 equalled 51% at the start of the period.
Then
 it started to go down sharply and reached a low point of 13% in 2015. The index of smokers between the
old
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age
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 of 36 to 50
years
 was almost a third in 1965,
on the
contrary
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 it declined considerably to less than a fifth in 2005,
however
, the figure showed a slight rise to 24 % in 2015.
By contrast
, the index of citizens of the UK who smoked cigarettes was 18% in 1965, it began to rise drastically to 63 %
at the end
 of the period.
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