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The charts above show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts above show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams show the percentage of
food
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 expenditures of the average family spent in
restaurants
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 in different decades.The other graph gives information about the number of
meals
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 eaten in fast
food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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.
Totally
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In total
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,information is given from 1970 to 2000. Starting with the first pie chart it is evident that more people preferred home cooking rather than going out to cafes because eat percentage of
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food
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the food
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 budget spent on
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restaurants
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restaurant
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meals
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 was only 10%.
Next
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The next
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 decade the eating out spends were about 5% more than
previous
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the previous
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 year of research.In 1990 we can see that
percentage
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the percentage
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 in 1990 had sharply grown and was already 35%.In
next
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the next
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 10
years
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years,
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 it is obvious that
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the trend
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 lasted because home eating took only half of the graph. The second pie chart shows that in 1970 the number of
meals
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 eaten both in fast
food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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 was equal.
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,in 1980 the sit-down places had a
slight
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slightly
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 bigger popularity
that
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than
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 fast
food
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.Despite being second in 1980,
fast
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fast-food
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food
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 places had sharp
grow
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growth
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 and bypassed sit-down
restaurants
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.In 2000 the fast
food
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meals
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 eaten were about 80,
while
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 in sit-down
restaurants
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 it was a bit less than 50
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, restaurants, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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