The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line chart displays the

proportion

of

tourists

to England that visited four

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attractions in

Brighton

from 1980 to 2010.

Overall

, the most significant feature of

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period is that foreign

tourists

who visited art galleries in

Brighton

saw a slight decrease. The percentage of foreign visitors who visited pavilions increased gradually,

while

the

proportion

of

tourists

who went

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rose more significantly between 1980 to 2010. The figure for festivals in

Brighton

which are visited by foreign visitors remained relatively stable over the 30-year period. The

proportion

of

tourists

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pavilions in

Brighton

was around a quarter in 1980, and

this

climbed dramatically to almost

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half in 1995 before declining drastically to just over 30% in 2010. The

amount

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of foreign visitors who visited piers

was fluctuated

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between just under 10% and around 15% between 1980 and 2000.

After

this

fluctuation, it saw a noticeable increase of roughly 10%, finishing at just above 20%

at the end

of the period. The

proportion

of

tourists

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art

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exhibitions in

Brighton

was just above a fifth and

this

figure increased to a peak of just below 40% in 1985;

however

,

this

ratio decreased to just below a tenth over the 25 years. The percentage of

tourists

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festivals fell slightly from about 30% to just under %30 from 1980 to 1985 and

then

this

ratio remained relatively stable at

this

level after 25 years.