The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram display the procedure of how hydroelectric power plant produce electricity.
Overall
, there Linking Words
is
two modes of operation, which are Change the verb form
are
day
mode and night mode that Use synonyms
included
the reversible operation of turbines.
First of all, Wrong verb form
include
the
Correct article usage
a
water
source Use synonyms
such
as a river can be used to fill the dam with Linking Words
high-level
reservoir. During the Correct article usage
a high-level
day
, the intake gate that can be found at the bottom of the dam will be opened Use synonyms
hence
making the Linking Words
water
flow downhill through the long pipe. As the Use synonyms
water
moves in the lower place, it will Use synonyms
then
rotate the turbine to Linking Words
making
a mechanical Wrong verb form
make
enegry
coming from those Correct your spelling
energy
motion
. Fix the agreement mistake
motions
Thereafter
the electricity is generated by Linking Words
generator
and Correct article usage
a generator
become
the supply of the national power grid after Change the verb form
becomes
going
passing through the power lines.
Meanwhile, during the night, the Verb problem
apply
water
that once had been passed the turbine will Use synonyms
then
Linking Words
storaged
at Add a missing verb
be storaged
low-level
reservoir before it Correct article usage
a low-level
Linking Words
finally
pumped back uphill by Add a missing verb
is finally
reversible
turbine to the high-level Add an article
the reversible
a reversible
of
reservoir. After all of the Change preposition
apply
water
Use synonyms
placed
uphill, the intake gate will be closed and opened again the next Add a missing verb
is placed
day
. Use synonyms
Finally
, all of the steps will be repeated all over again the next Linking Words
day
and onwards.Use synonyms
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words day, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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