The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram display the procedure of how hydroelectric power plant produce electricity.
Overall
, there
is
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two modes of operation, which are
day
mode and night mode that
included
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the reversible operation of turbines. First of all,
the
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water
source
such
as a river can be used to fill the dam with
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir. During the
day
, the intake gate that can be found at the bottom of the dam will be opened
hence
making the
water
flow downhill through the long pipe. As the
water
moves in the lower place, it will
then
rotate the turbine to
making
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a mechanical
enegry
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energy
coming from those
motion
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motions
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.
Thereafter
the electricity is generated by
generator
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a generator
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and
become
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the supply of the national power grid after
going
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passing through the power lines. Meanwhile, during the night, the
water
that once had been passed the turbine will
then
storaged
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at
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir before it
finally
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is finally
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pumped back uphill by
reversible
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the reversible
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turbine to the high-level
of
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reservoir. After all of the
water
placed
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is placed
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uphill, the intake gate will be closed and opened again the next
day
.
Finally
, all of the steps will be repeated all over again the next
day
and onwards.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words day, water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • potential energy
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • turbine
  • generator
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • power lines
  • gate-controlled tunnels
  • gravity-driven
  • transformation
  • clean energy source
  • sustainable
  • recycled water
  • mountainous area
  • activate
  • transmit
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