The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts given to us are given in two
separated
boxes. With between both boxes the name of the country it represents.
On Replace the word
separate
one
side, are represented bar charts which represent the percentage of total world oil
resources
. On the other side the percentage of total world Anual oil
consumption. The left block is represented in order from the bigger
to smallest, Replace the word
biggest
while
the other one
is in disorder.
On one
hand, more than half of the percentage of total oil
resources
are in the midde
east. It is Correct your spelling
middle
also
necessary to outline the fact that the gap between the Middle East and the Second country which has on its posesion
a high quantity of Correct your spelling
possession
position
oil
resources
which
is Canada doesn’t even come close to being as wealthy in Correct pronoun usage
apply
oil
resources
as the Middle East.
On the other hand
, it is not even close to being the biggest in the world at oil
consumption. However
this
time there is not one
representant
who dominates Replace the word
representative
on
all others. But three of them. Asia, Change preposition
over
United
States and Correct article usage
the United
western
Europe. The three of them consume more than 70% of Capitalize word
Western
Add an article
the worlds
worlds
Change noun form
world's
oil
.
Therefore
we can clearly notice the fact that the three biggest consumers of oil
only produce around 5% of the 70 they consume. While
,
the Remove the comma
apply
bigges
producer only consumes 6% of Correct your spelling
biggest
these 56%
.Change the determiner
this 56%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, oil, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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