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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in universities in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

#students #science #subjects #universities #countries #effects #society
Education has always been a prime concern of the world
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 time immemorial. In the contemporary era, we have available many
subjects
 like
science
, arts and commerce
while
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countries,
students
 do not opt for
science
 courses in universities. From my perceptive, there are many reasons
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this
 and
this
 may affect society. To commence with. There are enormous causative factors that make the pupils
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science
subjects
. First and foremost, some people believe that
this
 course is very hazardous and some
students
 cannot pass
this
 subject as it provides difficult areas
such
 as biology chemistry, physics and
such
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,
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, the
last
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academic survey
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 government that
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around 10% of
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scholars
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failed.
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 highlights,
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students
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 difficulty.
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, the majority of individuals are not interested
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 those issues.
Secondly
, The majority of folks are
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fascinated
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 studying arts courses
such
 as history, economics, and music as well.
For instance
,
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 Madras
university
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 in India, the
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seats
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of
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 economics subject were filled very quickly.
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 out that
students
 who select
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subjects
.
Therefore
, they can more concentrate on their field.
This
 is another reason for
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 problem. The primary effect
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is that
this
 would
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affect
 in each country's economy. One of the predominant
reason
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 is
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 availability of professionals in medical areas as doctors, nurses etc. To elucidate it, 'In Canada' there
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 no medical facilities
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doctors and nurses in their destination.
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availabilty
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availability
 of
science
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 their natives. To recapitulate, Education is a fundamental right of every
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. After their schooling,
the
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they
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 prefer to study their
intreted
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interested
 subject like history, economics and
such
as well as
 they do not select
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subjects
. The main reason is that they feel
difficuly
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difficult
difficulty
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effect
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affects
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in
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society harmfully like
availability
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the availability
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 of doctors, engineers and well.
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coherence cohesion
The essay lacks coherence due to the disorganized structure of ideas and paragraphs. The introduction and conclusion are partially present, but they lack clarity and effectiveness. The main points lack sufficient supporting details and examples, leading to a lack of clarity and depth in the discussion.
task achievement
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons for the lack of interest in science subjects and its effects on society. However, the ideas lack clarity and are not well-developed. The examples provided are not relevant and do not effectively support the main points.
lexical resource
The candidate demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and inaccuracies in word choice and expression. There is also a lack of variety in sentence structures, leading to repetitive and awkward phrasing.
grammatical range
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including tense and agreement issues, incorrect word forms, and awkward sentence structures. The errors significantly impact the clarity and coherence of the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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