The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The
bart
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chart
illustates
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illustrates
about
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apply
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the comparison of
avarage
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average
hours between people in
marriage
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married
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life
that
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who
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do voluntary
works
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work
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such
as household activities per week.
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, it
is explaining
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explains
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that the
number
of
women
who do the activities is higher than the
men
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number of men
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whether they have
child
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a child
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or not. The more and more
children
they have, the higher and higher per
cen
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cent
of
women
who do the
work
compare
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compared
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to the
men
who
is
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are
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getting less and less. When people enter
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apply
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marriage life, they usually
do
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the
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apply
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collaboration
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collaborate
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for finishing
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to finish
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the
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apply
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household tasks.
A
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The
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data shows that
women
in
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a relationship
the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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without any
children
do
the
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apply
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houseworks
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housework
around 30
percent
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per cent
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of the population
compare
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compared
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to
the
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apply
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men
whose
number
of doing
work
is under 20%. The
number
increases as many as the
number
of
children
above three which
reach
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reaches
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60% of
women
who do the
work
. The data shows
the
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a
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different trend between
the
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apply
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men
and
the
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apply
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women
that
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it
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seems the
number
of
men
is decreasing
by
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with
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the more kids they have.
For instance
,
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who
dont
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don't
have
children
only reach under 19% population who do the
work
while
men
with many
children
above 3 reach 17% of the population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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