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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The proportion of residents living in cities in four Asian
countrirs
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countries
 from 1970 to 2020, with predictions between 2030 and 2040 is illustrated by the line graph. In general, there has
noticeably
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 increase in all areas,
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include
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indoneesia
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Indonesia
.
Espeaclly the
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 highest
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 is in Malaysia, there
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 just 30% of
peolpe
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people
 living in cities in 1970, and
significantly
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it significantly
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increaced
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increased
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 45%
to
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 2020,
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around
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 80% in 2040 in total by predict. Looking
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in
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 the
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 in more detail, we can see that the second most amount of change
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 Indonesia, it is
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the lowest
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the lowest
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the four
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four
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the four
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 areas in 1970, but
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it dramatically
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become
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became
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 2nd high since 2010, and will
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increase
 more in the future. In
tern
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to
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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, the highest number was 50% in 1990, but
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it slight
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decreaced
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decreased
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 until 2010,
then
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might
 go up continuously .
Finally
, Thailand was stably
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increased
 from
begining
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beginning
 to the end of the illustrate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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