Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian. In your letter  describe what you like about the library  say what you don’t like  make suggestions for improvements.

#library #improvements #services #facilities #users #suggestions #librarian #don’t

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Dear

Library

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Manager, I hope

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letter finds you well. My name is Hendra and I am one of the students and regular customers of your

library

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. I am writing

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letter to inform my suggestion regarding your announcement about how to improve your

library

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services and facilities. On top of that, I really admire the facilities in

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library

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that have equipment to support customers in reading.

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, in every

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corridor

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, there are always

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stairs to assist readers in picking up a book. The facilities are satisfactory if there are many tables and chairs for the visitor to use. As a student, me and my group need a place to discuss about school program and it needs big tables and a couple of chairs. I kindly suggest adding more tables and chairs for the

library

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, so customers can read peacefully without being distracted by reading

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standing. Thank you and Regards,

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Address the specific points mentioned in the writing task, and ensure that your response fully addresses each aspect of the prompt in a clear and focused manner.

coherence cohesion

The logical structure of the letter could be improved by organizing the content more clearly and coherently. Use appropriate transitions and organization to better connect ideas.

lexical resource

Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and avoid repetition. Use a variety of words and phrases to enhance the richness of your writing.

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Pay attention to the use of grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure to convey your message clearly and accurately. Use a range of grammatical structures to express ideas effectively.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

154 words

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