The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

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The bar graph illustrates, the total number of non-profitable working hours finished by humans in a period of one week

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as gardening, household chores and childcaring in the homes. In overview, both females and males

which

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are not single are doing jobs without

recieving

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receiving

money to support their families.First of all, women with three or more infants

reaching

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the highest number of about 60 and they are giving care to their children, working in

house

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the house

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and in

garden

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the garden

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lowest

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the lowest

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population of married

woman

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women

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does not have kids with a maximum position of 30 and they are not working much since they don't have

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a child

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child

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children

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to take care of. To add on, all men with wives are workers,

either

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whether

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they have toddlers or not and their

family

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families

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remain steady and it's just below 20.In comparison,

woman

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a woman

the woman

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has

largest

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the largest

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number as compared to man,

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more wives are

practicing

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practising

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all duties to keep up

their

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with their

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children.All three families experienced

flactuations

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fluctuations

in all working activities.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

diagram
unpaid work
categories
average hours
men
women
comparison
overview
highest
differences
reasons
childcare
housework
gardening
gender roles
societal expectations
cultural norms
work-life balance

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