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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Harton at rhe beginning of the 21st Century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Harton at rhe beginning of the 21st Century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary.
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The map compares Harton
in
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 2000 to 2009 and represents the changes made.
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, the town was transformed from a residential area with local facilities to a more commercial city with a modern setup; a larger industrial outlet, a smaller space for the natural woodlands , schools, a higher institution,
shopping
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 corner and a car park. As for the natural resources, the lake was replaced with a smaller body of water and the area with trees and greenery
and
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was made smaller
together with
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 the line of houses which was located to the South of the river to create more space for expansion of the industries. To the West of Lakeside,the warehouses and an ancient town were demolished to serve more space for parking
of
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cars and official
complex
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complexes
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 respectively. The educational sector comprised
of
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a larger community with more schools and the establishment of
a
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higher
institution
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institutions
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 which were directly next to each other.
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, because of the erection of a movie theatre, the arts centre was demolished and
the
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 line of shops emerged to replace the residential area.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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