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The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003. Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter. To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon. However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.

The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003. Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter. To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon. However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.
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The line chart compares the average number of
visitors
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 in the United Kingdom who visited the museum in two seasons,
summer
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 and winter, in 2003. In general, the total number of
visitors
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 in the
summer
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 was always higher than in the winter. The
trend
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 was gradually increased until 12
p
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.
m
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. After 12
p
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.
m
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., the chart shows a decreasing
trend
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 in both seasons. In
summer
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, the
trend
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 showed a significant rise in
visitors
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 until 10 a.
m
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. The highest peak was between 11 a.
m
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. and 12
p
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.
m
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., with around 1500
visitors
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. After 12
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p.
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p.m.
m
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, the
trend
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 started decreasing gradually.
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 to
summer
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, the
trend
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 in winter
showeds
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showed
shows
 a significant increase from 0 to 500
visitors
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 at 10 a.
m
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. The highest number of
visitors
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 was 600 people and happened between 11 a.
m
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. and 12
p
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.
m
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. From 12
p
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.
m
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. to 2
p
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.
m
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., the
trend
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 started decreasing, and there was no visitor after 2
p
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.
m
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, summer, trend, p, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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