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The provided pie charts illustrate the number of hours spent in the library of a British university by three groups of students (undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population.)

The provided pie charts illustrate the number of hours spent in the library of a British university by three groups of students (undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population.)
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The provided pie charts illustrate the number of
hours
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 spent in the
library
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 of a British university by
three
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 groups of
students
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 (undergraduates, postgraduates and total student population.)
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen from the charts that postgraduate
students
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 spent the vast majority of time in the
library
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 of the
three
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 groups.
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, more than
a
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half of postgraduate
students
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 spent fifteen
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or
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 more
hours
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 in the
library
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 per week,
while
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 for average
students
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 spending
this
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 amount of time was not so common, precisely 15% of
total
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the total
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.
Furthermore
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, for the postgraduate level
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students
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students,
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this
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 figure was the
least
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lowest
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, less than a tenth.
Proportion
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The proportion
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 of undergraduates and postgraduates spending from eight to fourteen
hours
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 in the
library
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 per week was 28% and 32%, respectively,
whereas
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 for other
students
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this
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 figure was more than one in
three
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. Exactly
a
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apply
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half of all
students
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 and less than
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three quarters
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three-quarters
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 of undergraduates, as shown in the charts, spent from 1 to 7
hours
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 in the British
library
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.
In contrast
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, for postgraduates
this
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 was the
least
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lowest
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 figure, reaching approximately a fifth of
total
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the total
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.
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