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The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003. Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter. To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon. However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.

The given line graph illustrates the average data of a museum tourists in both summer and winter in the year 2003. Overall, it is observed that during summer, the museum had many visitors compared to winter. To begin with, the highest visits recorded were of about 1600 people to the museum at 12noon during the hot weather which declined to 800 people at 4pm. Whereas in winter about 500 visitors came at 10am which somewhat fluctuate till 12 noon. However, there was massive declined during the winter at 12noon till around 2pm whereas there was no visitors recorded from 2pm till 6pm unlike during summer, the downward trend was only from 4pm and there was no record of no visitors.
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The table and pie charts illustrate the financing and expenditure of a police force in a particular British region during the period between 2017 and 2018.
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, the British police force in the region received the majority of its funding from
the
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national politics, and the largest expense was the salaries for officers and staff.
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, a decrease in the percentage of the
budget
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 allocated to salaries,
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remained the highest expenditure.
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, with regard to funding, the national authority was the primary source of income for the police in both years, contributing more than half of the total account. In 2017, the total funds amounted to £304.7
million
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, with the national government providing £175.5
million
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.
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, local taxes contributed £91.2
million
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,
while
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 other sources provided £38
million
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. The total cost increased to £318.6
million
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 in 2018, with the national law's contribution rising slightly to £177.8
million
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. Local taxes increased to £102.3
million
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,
while
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 other sources saw a marginal increase to £38.5
million
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. Moving on to expenditure, salaries for officers and staff were the highest expense in both years,
although
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 the proportion of the
budget
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 allocated to
this
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 area decreased from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. The
budget
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 allocated to technology increased significantly from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. Meanwhile, buildings and transport both received the same proportion of the
budget
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 each year, at 17%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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