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Your local newspaper is offering an award for people who have helped the community. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. In your letter suggest someone you think should receive the award describe what the person does to help the community suggest an award that would be appropriate for this person You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, My
name
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 Andini Natia, I am writing to
exprees
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express
 my satisfaction
of
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Republika
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the Republika
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newpaper
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newspaper
award
. I would like to suggest Andrew to receive the creative
award
. First of all, I think Andrew
deserve
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 to get the creative
award
 because he
is
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always
help
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 to make designs, photos, articles,
and
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etc for the newspaper requirement. I
remembered
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,
the
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last
 three months, he
is always try
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 his best to help
Republika
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the Republika
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 newspaper. Why
creative
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a creative
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award
? As I mentioned before,
because
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Andrew
so
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 good in
creative
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the creative
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 industry.
However
, I think the editors would decide the best
award
 for him, based on his
experienced
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. The way he was taking and editing
photo
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photos
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 and the article he was writing. Thank you for your consideration of my suggestion and I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Andini Natia
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task response
Address the specific points mentioned in the prompt to ensure a complete and focused response.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each containing a single main idea to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Enrich the vocabulary by using a wider range of words and phrases to enhance the quality of writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammatical accuracy to convey ideas clearly and effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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