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The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given two-line graphs illustrate the information
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 the proportion of owning electrical appliances and the amount of time for doing chores in a week in the period of 1920 to 2019.
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, the proportion of those owning all appliances was in the upward trend,
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 the
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 for spending on housework indicated a downward trend. Looking for more details, the washing machines owned by 40% in 1920 and it began to continuously increase during the period of time ending at the highest proportion in 2019 at 60%. The ownership of refrigerators was at its lowest point in 1920 at 0%,
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, it sharply rose to 90% in 1960 and
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slightly
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 increased to 100% in 1980. After the year, the
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ratio
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 remained stable for the next three years. The ownership of Vacuum cleaners, the percentage was 30% in 1920 and it started continuously
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 to reach the highest ratio of 100% in 2000 with remained static rate for 2019 as well. Meanwhile, the number of
hours
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 for doing housework in one house was 50
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 per week in 1920. After the year, it noticeably fell to 20
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 in 1960. The number maintained the same
hours
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, ending with 10
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 in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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