The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where it is relevant

The diagrams below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where it is relevant
The images illustrate the plan for expanding the
school
site for two decades
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from 2004. At
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first glance, the most expanding site will happen in the most eastern area;
hence
the
school
is predicted to be able to admit more students significantly. Turning into details, the facilities
that
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planned to be erected will be
School
Building 3, which will be located
to
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the end of
existing
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path. Just the next of it,
school
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has decided to have another parking facility. Since the new parking site is far behind the main entrance, a road connecting
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the main entrance to the facility will be built. Apart from the addition, some sites will still remain the same with
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only small tweaks. The existing
school
landmarks will be connected, which will cut the pathway efficiently. The existing car park will be maintained
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at the place.
Lastly
, the
sport
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field will be cut down approximately one-third the size
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and moved to the southern of the new parking facility.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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