The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
In the present day,
computers
are an important tool to help almost everyone in the world to do many things
such
as studying at home, going online to meet new friends, enjoying online movies etc.
These
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The
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graphs above explain information about
computer
ownership
in
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apply
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between 2002 and 2010
include
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including
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percentage
Add an article
a percentage
the percentage
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of
computer
ownership
and
impact
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the impact
show examples
of
computers
to
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on
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education
about
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at
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that time.
In the
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The
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first
graph
that
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apply
show examples
explains the percentage of
computer
ownership
from 2002 to 2010.
This
graph
is constantly increasing
about
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by about
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5
percent
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per cent
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per year.
In
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From
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2002 to 2010,
this
percentage of
graph
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the graph
show examples
explains 55, 60, 65, 70 and 75
percent
in sequence.
Meaning
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This means
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that many
people
must use
computers
in their
life
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lives
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more than before. In the second
graph
, it explains that
people
in 2010 owned
computers
more than in 2002. The
graph
shows that
people
in college (incomplete) are the highest
percent
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per cent
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of differentiation but in postgraduate is the lowest
percent
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per cent
show examples
of differentiation. In summary, these
overall
graphs show that
computer
ownership
is
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has
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increasing
Wrong verb form
increased
show examples
along
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over
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that time and in studying
people
are
more
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apply
show examples
increasing than working
people
. That implies the
computer
is a fundamental tool of education.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computers, computer, ownership, graph, percent, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "explain" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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