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The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of males and females teachers in six types of educational settings in The UK in 2010.
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The graph given below represents the proportion of men and women faculties in different types of institutions in 2010.
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, the percentage of
female
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a female
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teacher
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teachers
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 was higher in 3 types of
instituions
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institutions
, namely, Nursery
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School
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Schools
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, Primary
School
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 and Secondary
School
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,
while
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, the
ratio
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 of men to women
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teacher
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teachers
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 in College was equal.
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, the percentage of Male
teachers
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 in Private training institutes and Universities was higher than female
teachers
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.
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 , in Nursery, Primary and
Secendary
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Secondary
school
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 percentage of
female
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a female
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teacher
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teachers
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 was 97%, 95%, and 57% , respectively. The
ratio
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 of male
teachers
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 in
same
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 schools was 5%, 7%, and 48%, respectively. The graph
clears
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 demonstrates that the number of female
teachers
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were
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 much higher than male
teachers
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 in Schools.
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, in College
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the percentage
 of male
teachers
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 was equivalent to the number of female
teachers
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, i.e, 50%. In Private training institutes and Universities in 2010, the
ratio
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 of male
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teacher
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teachers
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 was dominating the
ratio
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 of female
teachers
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. In Private Training Institutes, there were 55% men and 45% women
teachers
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,
whereas
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, in
Universities
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Universities,
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 70% were male faculty and
remaining
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the remaining
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 30% were female faculty.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words teacher, school, ratio, teachers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender distribution
  • educational settings
  • primary education
  • secondary education
  • further education
  • higher education
  • adult education
  • specialist education
  • dominance
  • balanced ratio
  • non-traditional roles
  • trends
  • percentage
  • male teachers
  • female teachers
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • statistical data
  • demographics
  • workforce composition
  • gender disparities
  • graph interpretation
  • educational workforce
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