The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
The graph depicts
informations
about employment in various fields in Freedonia by sex in Change the wording
information
pieces of information
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the year
year
1975 and 1995. The red dot indicates data for Fix the agreement mistake
years
women
,
and black for men. There are six areas that are described in the line chart, which are manufacturing, communications, finance or banking, wholesale and retail trade, non-Remove the comma
apply
defence
public sector
, and defence related
public Add a hyphen
defence-related
sector
. In 1975, women
workers are commonly contributing in the general public sector
areas with a number
of 650, rather than weapon-related public sector
jobs with a total of almost zero. On the other hand
, in the same year
the highest Add a comma
year,
number
with
male officers Change preposition
of
are
the same, Correct subject-verb agreement
is
also
in non-
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the non-defence
defence
public sector
section with a large number
of 850 people.
In the most recent data, there is a change in the business sector
with most women
, which is now wholesale and retail trade with around 790 human resources and defence
public sector
still being the least with a sum of 100 persons. Data on men
workers still stay the same with Correct your spelling
male
non-
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the non-defence
defence
public sector
being the highest (850) and defence
public Correct article usage
the defence
sector
the lowest (200).
Looking into more details
, there Fix the agreement mistake
detail
is
a significant Wrong verb form
was
raise
of career Correct your spelling
rise
women
in the communications and banking sectors between 1975 and 1995. While on
the opposite sex, there Correct word choice
On
are
almost no growth in all fields except Change the verb form
is
defence
public Correct article usage
the defence
sector
which had a decline in number
of people.Change the article
a number
the number
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