The following graphs show money spent on retaurant meals and home cooking and the number of meals per year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where revelent.

The following graphs show money spent on retaurant meals and home cooking and  the number of meals per year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where revelent.
The pie chart and the line graph reveal the
percentage
of
food
budget spent on
restaurant
meals
, home cooking and the number of
meals
per year. The data is calibrated in
percentage
. From an
overall
perspective, a dramatic increase is observed in the number of
meals
families
eat at
restaurants
. The
percentage
of the family's
food
budget spent on
restaurant
meals
steadily climbed. Just 10
percent
of the
food
budget was spent on
restaurant
meals
in 1970, and 15
percent
in 1980. That
percentage
more than doubled in 1990, to 35
percent
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, and rose again in 2000 to 50
percent
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per cent
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. Stating
further
, In 1970,
families
ate the same number of
meals
at fast
food
and sit-down
restaurants
. In 1980,
families
ate slightly more frequently at sit-down
restaurants
.
However
, since 1990,
fast
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fast-food
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food
restaurants
serve
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have served
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more
meals
to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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families
than
do
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the
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apply
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sit-down
restaurants
. In 2000 the
percentage
of fast
food
meals
reached the pinnacle at almost 90%
while
the
percentage
for sitdown
restaurant
meals
was approximately half.
Overall
, fast
food
meals
and
sitdown
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sit-down
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restaurant
meals
eventually started at the same
percentage
but within 30 years, fast
food
meals
'
percentage
surpassed its counterpart's to reach the pinnacle.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, food, restaurant, meals, families, restaurants, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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