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In modern times, children are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home.

During
this
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 modern era, there is a discernible trend among youngsters allocating less
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 in the company of their families,
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 concurrently increasing the duration of their
interactions
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 with peers. There exist numerous factors contributing to these prevailing patterns which drive increasing social
interactions
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 with friends. I hold the view that
parents
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 should not compel their
children
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 to increase the amount of
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 within the confine of their residence. The first and foremost reason is
children
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 feel
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 in their house because they do not get company inside their house to spend their leisure
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.
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,
parents
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 who are involved in jobs do not get
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 to spend
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 with their
children
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, they feel motivated to increase
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 with their friends outside their family.
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, engaging in social
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 with peers is an
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 tendency of human behaviours so they like to spend their
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 outside the
home
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. I think creating pressure is not a good idea to divert them from
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 tendency.
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, it can impact negatively their mental growth.
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, if
children
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 get less opportunity to spend
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 outside the
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 they can be frustrated which can reduce their productivity and creativity.
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, their physical growth can be hampered
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 fewer outdoor activities.
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,
parents
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 should mix with their
children
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 as a friend so that they feel less motivated to go outside from
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.
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, creating pressure could not be a good solution to drive
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 towards
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,
parents
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 should create a friendly environment in their house so that
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 want to spend their
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 with family willingly.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic commitments
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Technology and social media
  • Peer acceptance
  • Independence
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural norms
  • Individualism
  • Parental enforcement
  • Family bonds
  • Social development
  • Autonomy versus guidance
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