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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate summaries of aqua usage for 3 different occasions in 6 different regions of the world.
Overall
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, the majority of
water
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 has been used for irrigation purposes and minimum
water
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 utilization has been incurred for home use.
To begin
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 with, 84% in Africa, 88% in Central
Asia
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, 81% in South East
Asia
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, and 71% in South
America
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 have used a higher proportion of
water
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 for agricultural purposes;
however
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, in North
America
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 and Europe continent, the percentage of
water
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 utilization (39% in North
America
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, and 32% in Europe) for food production were below 50%.
Therefore
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, it is evident that most regions have used a higher percentage of
water
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 for agricultural activities.
In addition
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, Europe and North American continents have used a higher percentage of
water
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, mainly for Industrial activities (53% and 48% respectively).
In contrast
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, the amount of
water
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 usage for factories was relatively lower than 15% in the other 4 areas (South
America
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, Africa, Central
Asia
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, South East
Asia
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).
However
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,
water
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 usage for domestic purposes was significantly lower than 20% in all 6 areas of the world.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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