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You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter ro the singer. In your letter . say how you feel about his performance . give details of your musical activities . explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear Arijit Singh, I, Urvashi Bhavsar,
one
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 of your biggest
fan
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. I hope
this
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find
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 you in great health. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my joy and happiness,
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 I attended your annual musical
concert
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last
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 Saturday in Ahmedabad. I waited for your
concert
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 since the day I saw
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post
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 on your
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 account. I booked my ticket on the spot.The evening of the
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concert
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 was
one
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 of the
memorable
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evening
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 for me and I will
cherished
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 that forever. The most amazing thing about the
concert
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 was your
extra ordinary
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 voice and I couldn't handle myself without dancing
with
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 every
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songs
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song
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. I believe
this
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one
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 is
one
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 of the best live performances
due to
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rocking
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 band music, energetic sound systems and crazy aura from the
audiences
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. I would like to share my musical interest with you
also
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. I have a group of friends and we
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make
songs
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 by writing to compose music
everything
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. If you don't mind I will share my new upcoming
songs
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 that I
compose
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 by our team and I Would like yup to give some feedback about the song and music. I know it sounds crazy but if you can read my letter and give me
response
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 to sing a song for our band will
the life long
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 dream come true moments for all of us. Your forever loyal fan and
well wisher
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. I would like you to wish the best
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health for all the time and I hope you will entertain us with your amazing voice and
songs
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 forever. Best regards, Urvashi

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, well-structured main body paragraphs, and a concise conclusion to improve logical structure. Use paragraphing effectively to group related ideas together.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper salutation at the beginning and a suitable closing at the end of your letter to improve the scores for greeting and closing.
coherence cohesion
Stick to one idea per paragraph and use linking words to connect paragraphs and sentences for a more coherent flow of ideas.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, providing sufficient detail for each point. Ensure that what you write is directly relevant to the set questions.
task achievement
Make sure your tone is consistent and appropriate throughout the letter, reflecting the formality level of the task.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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