The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar graph compares forecasted world illiteracy rates by male and female in six areas for the
last
year, measured in percentage.
Overall
, the figures of illiterate women were higher than men in all regions, predominantly in Arab states and South
Asia
nations. To commence with, South
Asia
had the largest percentage of the population with no reading and writing abilities, dominated by females at approximately 55%
while
the
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males accounted for 35%.
On the contrary
, developed countries, barely above par
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genders, recorded the lowest statistics. In between those regions, ordered from the biggest to the least figure, were Arab States, Sub-Saharan Africa, East
Asia
, and Latin
American
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. Illiterate women in the first two areas mentioned were beyond 45%,
while
the rest were between 10 to 20%. The percentages of men who cannot read or write were lower than women, topped with South
Asia
, followed by Sub-Saharan Africa at merely above 30 and Arab states at barely below that number.
Lastly
, the least illiterate male population were in
Caribbean
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at precisely 10 and Oceania at roughly below that figure
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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