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You are staying in an alien country. You have recently received a letter from your wife in which she has complained of your son's activities. Write a letter to your son to counsel him. In your letter, write: what you came to know about his behaviour why you are upset about such activities what kind of behaviour you are expecting from him

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Dear Son, How are you? I hope you are in sound health and doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about your recent activities that I got from your mother. As you know, well
behavior
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 is a crucial part of human society. The more you behave well with
people
, the more respect you will earn from them. I just got the information that nowadays, you are not doing well behaving with family members or with other
people
 surrounding you.
This
 is really shameful for us as your parents. Your activities made us feel upset.
People
 have been discussing negatively not only your bad
behavior
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 but
also
 our family members. Because
people
 can't believe that we have a son like you who is always doing unexpected
behavior
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 with
people
. We always expect that you will behave well with every person you meet. Always keep in mind that good
behavior
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 is one of the most important assets of human characteristics. I strongly believe that you will realize your
misbehavior
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 and make yourself
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. Take care of yourself. Best regards, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear logical structure, and that each idea flows smoothly to the next.
coherence cohesion
Include a proper greeting and closing to bookend your letter professionally.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a single idea per paragraph and avoid mixing different points in one paragraph.
task achievement
Address all parts of the prompt fully, providing ample information and details where necessary.
task achievement
Maintain an appropriate tone throughout the letter, matching the gravity of the situation and the relationship between sender and recipient.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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