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The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The bar chart below gives information on the percentage of british people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The bar chart illustrates the details of British
people
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 who provide money to
charity
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 by
age
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 in the years between 1990 to 2010 in percentage.
Overall
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, the majority of
charity
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 is given by the middle-aged group
while
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 the minimum percentage of help is provided by the teenage group
people
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 in both years. In 1990, the lowest percentage of help was given by the 18-25
age
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 group which was around 18%
while
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 the highest
amount
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 of
people
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 between
ages
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the ages
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 of 36 to 50 provided about 45%.
However
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, a significant
amount
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 is given from
age
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 groups 51-65 and 65 plus around 35% and 32% respectively.
Whereas
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, very lowest
amount
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 recorded in the year 2010 around 5% from teenage
people
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 but other community
charity
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 was much higher than them. From
age
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 51 to 65 individuals lend almost 40% to
charity
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 which is highest
this
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 year and the remaining middle and elder persons are given the same
amount
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 approximately 35%
while
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age
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ages
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 between 26 to 35 given about 32% in the same year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, charity, age, amount with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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