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The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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is
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a
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report describes a system,
which
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called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC)
and
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which
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producted
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produces
 electricity. The report is the
long term
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 production for a university lecturer. In general, the are two ways of
the
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production by pouring warm
seawater
 or cold sea
water
 through each of
two
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the two
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 chambers.
As a result
, one makes
watse
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waste
 salt
water
,
otherwise
, another one
products
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 fresh
water
 for drinking. Getting back to the details, the distance between warm
seawater
 and cold
seawater
 is 1000 miles as cold
water
in
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 5 degrees, meanwhile,
the
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warm
water
in
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 29 degrees.
To begin
 with, it starts with warm
water
 by solar energy converts into
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water
.
Then
, it
pass
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 through the
evacuatedevaporation
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evacuated evaporation
 chamber, which makes salt for cold
water
 phases. After that, the
turbin
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turbine
 creates
electricty
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electricity
 to
product
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 pure
water
 for drinking in
water
 vapour.
On the other hand
, cold
seawater
 or salt as
result
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a result
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 of the hot
water
 process
are
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 wasted.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seawater, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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