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The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The diagram below shows the production of electricity using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC). Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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a
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report describes a system,
which
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called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion (OTEC)
and
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which
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producted
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produces
 electricity. The report is the
long term
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 production for a university lecturer. In general, the are two ways of
the
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production by pouring warm
seawater
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 or cold sea
water
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 through each of
two
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the two
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 chambers.
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, one makes
watse
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waste
 salt
water
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,
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, another one
products
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 fresh
water
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 for drinking. Getting back to the details, the distance between warm
seawater
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 and cold
seawater
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 is 1000 miles as cold
water
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in
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 5 degrees, meanwhile,
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warm
water
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in
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 29 degrees.
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 with, it starts with warm
water
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 by solar energy converts into
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water
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.
Then
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, it
pass
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 through the
evacuatedevaporation
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evacuated evaporation
 chamber, which makes salt for cold
water
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 phases. After that, the
turbin
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turbine
 creates
electricty
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electricity
 to
product
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 pure
water
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 for drinking in
water
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 vapour.
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, cold
seawater
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 or salt as
result
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 of the hot
water
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 process
are
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 wasted.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seawater, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • OTEC (Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion)
  • evaporator
  • ammonia
  • turbine
  • generator
  • condenser
  • closed-loop system
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable technology
  • temperature gradient
  • environmental impact
  • electricity production
  • deep seawater
  • surface seawater
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