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Writing Samples
Band 5

The street where you live is in poor condition. Write a letter to local City Council in your letter you Explain the situation Explain the likely consequence Describe the change you expect to occur

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Dear the city council, I am writing to you about Gülan
Street
. I live there and we have some issues. We want to change some rules of the
street
 because our
children
 and elders
can
Verb problem
are
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 not comfortable there.
First,
our
children
 cannot play in the
street
 because there are a lot of drivers making their car park in the
street
.
Therefore
, there is not enough place for
children
.
Second,
the
street
 is not clean because cleaner your staff visit here just once a week.
Third,
citizens want a park here where our elderly people can sit and
children
 play. I strongly believe that you can fix our problem because
this
 is your job and we
are
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have
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choose
Wrong verb form
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 you to fix our problems. If that problem is not a solution I will write the problem in the local
newspeopre
Correct your spelling
newspaper
 so every local person knows the problems. Thank you for your answer. Kind regards.... Mehmet ali kılıç
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the content of your letter is well-organized, with clear and logical sequencing of ideas. Each paragraph should be focused on a single issue to maintain coherence.
greeting and closing
Include an appropriate opening and closing salutation for a formal letter. Make sure your closing is polite and shows respect to the recipient.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should introduce and develop one key idea related to the prompt. This will keep your arguments clear and support the overall coherence of the letter.
task achievement
Make sure you address all parts of the task adequately, explaining the situation clearly, the consequences, and specifying the changes you hope to see, with relevant details.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a formal and polite tone suitable for a letter to a city council, especially when expressing dissatisfaction or making requests.
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